The eyes in the painting followed him down the corridor, and then the painting started moving.
I was so scared, I ran to go out of the corridor but the door was locked. The painting on the wall came out and it was getting closer and closer.
Suddenly, someone opened the door. As soon as the door opened the painting went back to the frame on the wall.
Tuesday, 7 November 2017
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Hussain
ReplyDeleteA really great idea to create some tension for the reader. Good writing leaves the reader with an emotion of some sort. How could you have helped the reader to connect even ore with the a story? Maybe describe the 'fear' using other senses? e.g. the sense of 'sweating', or shaking, that you might feel when you are afraid? Your heart beat booming inside your head?